Saturday, May 18, 2013

A Scar

a scar
blinking, faded
white storyline to hit
hidden fallings, left forgotten
now breaking out, a sign, the certain curse 
best left to night or tidal reach
best given to the moon
to wash away
a scar




Rictameter (2,4,6,8,10,8,6,4,2)
for Imaginary Gardens
Sunday mini-challenge

12 comments:

  1. The title and repeating line, a scar, speaks of a deep emotional issue ~ There are scars that never fades or ever washed away ~ Beautiful work on the form ~

    Thank you for linking up to Sunday's Challenge ~

    Happy weekend ~

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  2. This poem is very evocative. The images are tightly woven thanks to the style, and I really like the inter-play of light and dark.

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  3. Scar can even be the source of inspiration for a poet... nice one...

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  4. I love the description, "storyline," so true...they do hold stories. Well done!

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  5. There is much in this one despite it's compact form. Well done!

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  6. gosh this one is piercing. excellent.

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  7. Oh how I wish scars could be washed away ... your poem touched me deeply.

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  8. This hit me right in the heart... "white storylines." There are so many stories to be told by scars, but these sound like they were left by particularly disturbing wounds.

    So glad you posted on Real Toads, so I could see your offering. Peace, Amy

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  9. Very evocative...scars have stories wish could wash them away too!

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  10. love this every single word, deep and emotional I will read this many times

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